i know i havent posted much poetry lately, but i just made one up. so here it is, its not that good, but who cares right??? tell me wat u think. and don't be shy, tell me if u hate it please, i truly want 2 no.
Snow covered river,
Why is he dead?
The thought makes me shiver,
It sticks in my head,
He drown in the cold,
With no help for him,
With nothing to hold,
And to weak to swim,
He died in pain,
Without a goodbye,
No need to explain,
And no need to cry,
Like he would say,
“Its just life child,
“It’ll be okay,
Its just one day,”
Your misery will end,
It always does,
Your heart will mend,
Just because.
- Taylor Tot
Sunday, August 24, 2008
Just Because
Posted by lone poet at 12:05 AM
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6 comments:
Wow, your poem's pretty good.
I don't do much with poetry usually, but like it, it makes you think. Like how he said "It's just life child", sounds like he's either really peaceful, or he just doesn't care if he lives or dies alltogether. Interesting. Keep writing :).
Ahh that totally sucks about your coach, I wouldn't be able to handle that either. We already have sexist issues here, but it's about our team compared to the boys team. Like they get nets in their goals already, are allowed to run the roads, get to scrimage at this nearby tournament park, and at their games they actually get a scoreboard. We get none of these, so I think I'm going to bitch about it :P.
I love having close friends like that :). I think the week will be okay, I have my boyfriend to hang out with for a couple of the days, until he leaves for a week too, hahah. Everyone goes places but me :P.
i think it's pretty good. but it's kinda depressing. i'm a big sucker for sun-setter type things. but i do like this one. talk to you later.
-Christine♥
another solid poem. well done.
and thnx for the pleasant but late song.
phelps will never stop sucking
Pretty good. It IS kind of depressing though. Still, I like it.
we like some of the same books
u read some of sarah dessen's books
so do i and u read a whole lot of vampire books :)
that was awsome but a lil creepy cuz someones dyin'
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